Thumbnail: Great. I love the picture you chose and the font. Video: Probably could have been more cuts. there was a lot of boring time spent collecting things. Also for the first few minutes I didn't realize that you had any game audio in the video cause the music is pretty dominant. Having the music in the foreground is probably still good since you don't have commentary, but maybe try and time the edits and action with the flow of the music. Title: Good. A little misleading with the "First Experience" part. That gives the viewer an expectation of commentary usually, so you might lose some retention there. Pretty good video overall, but honestly the 2nd half is where it's at cause that's where all the action is. You might lose a lot of viewers early on because of how long and slow the first half is. My crew just started talking about the idea of playing this, so I'm excited to do some of this myself!

I'm starting to get bored here.

Nothing important seems to be happening here, so you maybe should have just edited it out.

So there were some parts where it didn't seem like anything was happening (like looting or when you were dropping), so you should probably edit some of that stuff out. Also since the title talked about this being your first experience, maybe you could have kind of progressed the video with some kind of narrative based around that. Off the top of my head, just basic text screens like 'I used to suck,' and then a clip of you dying, followed by a, '...then I got better,' followed by you winning a fight. Also if you don't want to use your voice, consider flashing text on the screen. It's amazing how text can add personality like with a smiley face :)

Great thumbnail! One thing that annoyed me was that the game music and the background music were overlapping at least in the beginning. I found the title a little bit too long. You should have cut the gameplay more, there were too many not very interesting events included in the video. The audio turned suddenly too loud at 3 min stamp, I don't know why just not keep it as it was at the beginning. There was barely anything that would have kept me watching because it was uncut and no commentary was included.

I really like the thumbnail you used, it looks like it took alot of time. The start of the video is a little slow though, you probably could've cut some more stuff out, but I haven't played spellbreak before so I don't know how much of this was essential. You could've taken out the (xbox one gameplay/free to play/crossplay) from the title and added it to the description instead, maybe you could've used something like "How I became a mage in SPELLBREAK" or "Becoming a a Battle Mage: SPELLBREAK" I also think you could've played maybe 3 or 4 more games and tried syncing the music to when you were in fights and got a kill or something, but this isn't bad though. The music was also a little loud sometimes though. The action definitely picks up in the later parts of the video, and it looks really fun so maybe you should keep playing! This game looks like it can only get better from what I've seen in this vid

The music is too much. I can’t hear the game and the gameplay is boring at times.

The video was ok, the quality overall was nice, but I do think that it has a few problems. One of the biggest problems for me was the music. I don't think the music is bad, but I don't think it was used at the right times in the video. Exciting music was playing when you were just going around picking things up. When you were fighting, a slower song was playing that really did not match the mood. I think the songs you chose are great background sounds, maybe played under the gameplay and yourself talking. I think the pacing was a bit slow, a lot of walking around doing nothing, which I understand is a huge chunk of battle royale games, but I think if you are making highlights, you should do a lot more cutting to combat and a lot less standing around looking for things. I really like the game itself, I've never heard of it, and it looks like something I would like to check out. I really like the idea of the video too, you playing for the first time, but I think it would be nice to have some commentary. I think you should keep making videos, keep up with the editing, and have some fun while doing it.